As we howl in vain, for the sorrow we share. A song of love, hope, and dispair. When the ones we love slip away, we cry to them, to show them the way. When their sprits reach the the light blue sky, they fly higher and higher, until their songs die. After that happens, all the wolves leave. To let the little wolf sprit, rest in peace. |
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My first poem
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 It is very good for your first poem. The only thing I see that needs some work are a few minor spelling errors, which aren't any big deal. Also, I am not sure if you wrote it that way on purpose, but the "until their song dies" line would go along with the rhyming pattern for the rest of the poem if you reworded it like this; "until their songs die." It is a very good poem, it will defintely be going into my favorites. One other word of advice, if someone tells you something is wrong with your poem, but you think it is just fine, let it the way it is. I hope you continue writing and I am always open for questions regarding writing, life, anything really.
 -- When everything seems to be crashing down around you, remember just this one thing; I'll be there to hold the weight of the world. I thank you for your advice, I wrote this poem in 7th grade, I'm in 10th now. SO i havent revised it. I appecate it and thanks again.
No problem
-- When everything seems to be crashing down around you, remember just this one thing; I'll be there to hold the weight of the world. dude, i love it.
upload more poems. please. okie dokie
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